Everything's great but the sound!
That was hilarious, but almost every male voice in this was way, way too quiet. The female voice actress was fine.
Graphics were good and the story line was hilarious. Really, the only thing that kept this from being a 9 or a 10 in my book was the guys' voices being too quiet.
Hope you'll do more with this!
I don't get it, I listen to this on my laptop, and everybody sounds just fine. But yeah, I tried to quiet everybody down 'cause the mono quality really sounded bad, but I couldn't exactly fix it easily. I dunno, I might edit it pretty soon if I get the chance.
Nice job, but missing something.
This is beautiful, and you get 10/10 for the effort you must've put into this work. The photography is splendid, the setting is gorgeous, and the way you put the scenes together is nearly flawless.
Still, I was left feeling like something was missing. A plot, maybe? Character development? A longer film? I don't know; it just feels like something that is this well put together should have more substance to it. It's beautiful imagery, but little more -- and I can't believe that the author of such an amazing work wouldn't be able to come up with a solid story line to match this piece.
So:
Graphics: 9. There were a couple of holes where I felt like you could have added a frame or two, but overall, this was beautiful.
Style: 6. Beautiful work... but it just felt like it was only skin-deep.
Sound: 10. Nice job there.
Violence: 5. No actual violence was done, although there were a lot of close calls -- but I didn't hold this score against you.
Interactivity: 1. Not really very much, but again, I didn't hold it against you.
Humour: 0. Not funny, but it wasn't supposed to be, so again, I didn't hold this against you.
Overall: 8. With a solid story line, this would have been a 10, but as it is now, it's a live-action stick fight, devoid of feeling or purpose.
I really hope you develop this a bit more. It's too good not to get the attention it deserves.
Thank you for your detailed response! Indeed, I fully admit that I could've inserted an actual plotline that would make this my masterpiece, but given the tight timelimit (School is coming!), I could only provide the actual story at my site (coming soon).
The second part of the film will set up a plot, which will be told in words.
ROFL!
That was great! The presentation was spectacular -- theater quality introduction that really set the movie up well. The music was perfect, the graphics were nicely drawn, and the animation was smooth and appropriate -- although there were a couple of areas where some more detail would have been nice, like on the school of fish. Seeing Nemo in his zip-up fish suit was *hilarious*, though, and the artwork there was perfect, so I really can't complain much about the detail work.
I can imagine you'll get complaints about the length of this. Sure, it could have been longer, especially after that kind of intro, but that only added to the gag for me, honestly. The end credits were done well -- although, again, a little more animation on the detail of the bubbles would've been nice.
One more suggestion, since some people still have slow connections: add a preloader when you submit here. Your file size is large enough that the movie will lag for those with dial-up connections -- thus ruining the movie entirely. You can get a free preloader right under the "Submit" button you used to submit this flash.
You obviously put a lot of effort into this, and I admire that. I hope you'll keep working with Flash, and I hope you'll submit your future work to Newgrounds.
5/5, 9/10 (mostly due to occasional animation/graphics detail and lack of a preloader).
Whenever I tried to publish it with the Newgrounds preloader it would crash my computer...and my brother's computer...and my spare computer...and the internet.
It's a start.
It's not bad, but I think you could do a lot better with this.
For starters, lose the "Wii" part of it. It's completely unrelated to the movie, and it's silly. It's a movie about Mario and the holidays, not about the Wii.
Also, the sprites didn't quite look right. Mario and Luigi both looked a little thin. The movements weren't quite right on, either. Compare what you did to a Mario game, and notice the difference.
The words popping up out of the box were a nice idea, but the font seemed a little plain. You could spruce it up a little and add some holiday-ish stuff to go with it, or at least make the words the appropriate colours for the holiday (red and green for Christmas, blue and white for Hanukkah, etc.)
It's a good first effort, though, and I hope you'll work some more on this.
Oh, yes, and re-release it around the holidays. :)
Yeah i hate that, but I couldnt get any good spritesheets. Ill try to fix that when I "spruce it up" :P Thanks for the honest comments, I take constructive criticism well.
Hm.
I've seen this come through the portal exactly like this several times, and each time, it's been blammed. Perhaps it's worth redoing some of this to make it more interesting. Surely you've gotten some constructive criticism from the other reviewers who have left you comments in the past?
I like the play, er, I mean, movie, and I like that you're trying to redo it as a sprite flash. However, the quality of some of your graphics was less than stellar, and the frame rate was low enough that everything looked really choppy. Also, the volume of the songs was pretty low.
This is Newgrounds, so you're going to have a hard time getting people to accept a song scene with no action whatsoever. While they're singing, have them *doing* something; keep your audience entertained while they're listening to the music clips, and you'll have a lot better luck with this.
The first few times, you got my protection vote, but now that you've submitted it unchanged several times, I'm voting to blam it. But I hope you'll improve it and submit a new version, because I really do like this idea.
You just lost a protection point buddy!
Anyway, thanks for the advice.
Not a bad start at all!
This looks good! Whether it's a test or not, I hope you'll leave it on here and let it be the set-up for your new series. The graphics were well-done (although I read what you said about improving them for the next one and I agree; I think you should work a little more on them), and the animation and lip-sync looked good as well. Maybe increase the frame rate just a little to make it look less choppy next time... otherwise, not bad at all.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
Thanks
Ha, that was great!
I love it. A great blend of excellent animation and classic, old-school cartoon humour. Great story line, too. Even though I was cringing the whole time because I just *knew* what was going to happen, it still caught me by surprise and made me laugh out loud.
Beautiful work. 5'd and 10'd.
*tips hat* :)
WHAT.
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